its so depression/ dealing with this recession/ will this ever stop thats the question/I learned my lesson/I now need to pray to god in order to receive my blessings/cuz lately i been stressing/heading the wrong direction/gas and food prices are really affecting/my pockets things are now sky high like rockets/everyday I wish for this to stop quick/cuz all it is is nonsense/even its hard for me to go back to college

2 things… the first 3 words don’t sound right
its so depression? say it to urself it dont sound right and the last line
should be its even hard, not even its hard cuz its doesn’t sound right
besides those lil errors I think ur on to something

its so depressing??

I disagree wth you B Milli about the first line. One of the things I love about rap is you don’t have to be correct in your English. If I say something in a weird way but you understand it, that’s cool as far as I’m concerned. To Flex, I’d say like I said before. Make it more about you personally. Were you going to college? Which one? Try rhyming the name for example instead of rhyming ‘recession’ with several other words like it, which is a more obvious way to go.

I cant even buy clothes/cuz these republicans took my doe/like they were my pimps and im their hoe/ wondering about my future and where I will go/always broke/my pockets have lent/Im glad i aint move out my moms crib cuz i dont have to pay rent/never got into a accident or any major incident/

I hate being broke/cant even buy clothes/cant even buy sneakers/cant even buy speakers for my car/its so hard i tried to pay my credit cards/bit by bit/next thing you know i gots to pay the insurance for my whip/on top of the that health insurance and other types of shit/will this ever quit/i think itll never quick/these money hungry funny pricks are getting rich/off of us/thats sucks/thats nuts/

Better. It’s too easy to blame the republicans though. Many democrats voted for the policies that got us to this point. The lenient lending practices at the root of the financial crisis are essentially “liberal” in nature.

WHAT PARTS WAS GOOD OR BAD?

worrying about my future and where I will go/ I cant even buy clothes /my pocket’s full of lent/ Im glad i aint move out my moms crib cuz i dont have to pay rent/never got into a accident or any major incident/ I hate being broke/ cant even buy sneakers/cant even buy speakers for my car/ buying gas with my credit cards/ paying them off bit by bit/ next thing you know i gots to pay the insurance for my whip/and for my health and other types of shit/will this ever quit/ some money hungry funny pricks are getting rich/off of us/thats sucks/thats nuts/ it makes me sick

^ try to work with that

its cool but i really didnt want u to fix it tho

A simple thank you would be fine. By fixing it I showed you what I thought was good and bad.
The shit I left out is what I thought was bad.

man….yall got me..really wanting…to hear this…shit! flex…get off that bullshit,son

i aint mad. thanks proph….......my bad

worrying about my future and where I will go/ I cant even buy clothes /my pocket’s full of lent/ Im glad i aint move out my moms crib cuz i dont have to pay rent/never got into a accident or any major incident/ I hate being broke/ cant even buy sneakers/cant even buy speakers for my car/ buying gas with my credit cards/ paying them off bit by bit/ next thing you know i gots to pay the insurance for my whip/and for my health and other types of shit/will this ever quit/ some money hungry funny pricks are getting rich/off of us/thats sucks/thats nuts/ it makes me sick
or
this shit got me sick/ spending my chips/from putting gas in my whip/to spending money on my insurance/yeah-... i have to endure this/as long i got some securerance/im fine, according to my endurance/hopefully shit will change like the weather/for worst or for the better/as long as im striving to get this chedda and stay tuff like leather/

shit,well how can i perfect my flow?

practice practice and more practice! and try flowing to some dipset beats thats a challenge

just do you man is the best advice i can give you . . if you get too many ppls advice your gonna steer away from what point you were really trying to make . . spit what comes to you the way it comes too you. . critique yourself after you get it all the way done and you will be able tell what sounds better ya dig

like that suggestion blackice, yea just freestyle in your car plug in ya ipod or put sum instrumentals on a cd and practice at it thats how you get a swagger and a flow

yep freestyling is the best way to get better, no doubt about that!
But, another thing is you gotta have some talent at work too and intelligence
alot of these rappers aren’t intelligent enough to write there own rhymes but
have the talent to spit it. others can write but don’t have the talent to spit it.
you gotta just make the best of what God gave u and read! Expand ur vocab
it will help alot!

i can write and spit but sometimes my writing be awkward and aint put right.

its not about who you better than/
i still relate to veterans/
liberals, conservatives…
we all humans…
not desevering this/
recessions depressing/
forcin troops to press in/
nothing to invest in/
pullin over poor folk to arrest them/
rich people molest them/
middle class dies at war/
dies in stores…
pride plus more…
work em nine from 5 to 4/
the drives just more…/
time from there children and you bill them/
taking food from their mouths/
i think either way its stealing/
cage most of congress…
throw the banks in handcuffs/
plant coke on the senators…
oh wait it’s there just lock em up/
that will be some “real change”...
till then things are still same/
proper healths cares looking real rare…
homeless need a meal mang/
real shame… insurance?
im looking for assurance…
that my kids will get a piece…
maybe then I’ll rest in piece.
Some stressed released…
my debts deceased…
credit scores? to raise em
just become indebted more…
cmon fund a campain…
you’re broke but help barack or mccain/
the banks shall reign/
you can’t abstain/
look who controls your domain/
they’ll suck away our life and drain and drain
till no power left here to regain/
the terrorist are inside…
they help us lose our focus/
media and hollywood…
bombard us till we go nuts/
go nuts yea were crazy…
chips in our babies…/
AI cuz were lazy/
we can solve rubics cube…
but still don’t know who made we/
respect ice but not life…
dollars spent on war but whats the price/
i don’t think we have really a clue man…
cmon think about if it was you man/
chilling at ya crib and they kicked it in…
yelling get on the floor and took ya children/
all ya neighbors hiding up in their basements…
grandpa killed himself cause he couldn’t face it…/
country is at war communities replaced wit…
soldiers in uniforms AK you’re faced wit…/
the barrel as you’re carted off to a cage quick…
just me thinking about it is enough to be made sick/
whether you’re a terrorist or not interigation…
just 2 days ago you were trying to fund your education/
where are your children where’s your wife…
will you escape this situation with your life/
what will it take for us all to see…
were all killing each other cuz we don’t agree/
arguing and arguing when know one really knows whats right…
it seems that were just fighting only because we love to fight.

Agree with Proph take Snoop 4 example with that shizzle dizzle my nizzle… haha …Damn Harlequinn That`s some nice lyrics. Flex if you listen 2 ur own tracks and it ain`t feeling right than probably it ain`t ….and the other way around!

I swear/this is our worst year/hopefully itll be all clear/high prices are everywhere/from food to gas/money in our pocket wont last/i ask my self/what we living for not wealth/I want help will anybody give me it/

Yo Flex did you ever try the switch words/lines trick? kindda like …..”hopefully itll be all clear/I swear,this is our worst year”....and so on that way you can create endless variations with the same lyrics..`...just a little trick i use when i write hope it work 4 you 2 …peace. ZinO